A frightening experience(Draft one)
I had a thriller of a frightening experience when I was young. It happened on an otherwise ordinary Sunday. As a usual, I was at the beach, playing with my cousins, while my father and uncle were fishing. All at once, I felt unbalanced and then slipped into the ocean. Initally, I firmly believed that I could be saved; therefore, I struggled to grab everything around me, but in vain. Gradually, I lost my energy and felt unconscious. At the same time, all of my memory began to emerge in my mind just as a video was projecting. Without any energy, I immediately fell into a swoon for quite a minutes. Discovering that I was drowning, my uncle came to my aid and saved me at once. When I recovered from consciousness, I found myself lay on the seashore with my family around. They continued to asked me if I felt great. Because I forgot what had happened a short while ago, I looked at them doubtfully. After their description, I finally realized that I was saved by my uncle . After this accident, my family have stopped me going to the beach for a long time. As a saying goes,” Once bitten twice shy.” Now, I still try not to approach the ocean. It was so frightening an experience that I still remember it till now.

2 Comments:
"As a usual,"should be "As usual"
"They continued to asked me if I felt great."should be"...asking me..."
Wow, it was really terrible~
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