An embarrassing experience(Draft one)
I had a very embarrassing experience. When I was an elementary school student, I once did badly on my math test. When I saw my grades , I couldn't help crying. Everyone in my class was suprised . My good friends came to me and said,"It is all right.Don't be sad." But some boys started laughing at me and said,"Stop crying .You're embarassing yourself." I was very angery and embarrassed. After school, I stayed in my classroom instead of going home. My best friend, Amy , sat beside me and said ,"Let's go home. Don't be sad." , so I stood up and left with her. All of a sudden, I tripped and fell . It was so funny that Amy counld't help laughing. I was so mad and said,"why are you laughing at me ? Don't you know I am embarrassed ?'' "Sorry,but it is very funny. Forgive me,"she said. I forgave her, and went back home . What an embarassing experience!

6 Comments:
"Sorry,but it is very funny. Forgive me,"Behind the sentence,you should use".",right?
By the way,if you avoid using the same sentence(can't stop...),it should be better!
有這樣的一個朋友真好,說真的我不知道妳那麼脆弱,現在變比較堅強了,畢竟妳是"大隻"
"Sorry,but it is very funny. Forgive me,"she said. 這個符號"應該擺在,之前
I forgave her, and went back home .
逗號後面的句子 好像少了什麼 我也不會講
大隻給人很有力的感覺消失了= ="...
除了標點符號...其他應該就沒什麼問題了!
Not bad!
I can't believe that you were a such little girl...
don't cry baby
Everyone in my class was suprised.
這句的"surprised"拼錯了。
Stop crying .You're embarassing yourself.
這句的"embarrassing"拼錯了。
I was very angery and embarrassed.
這句的"angry"拼錯了。
It was so funny that Amy counld't help laughing.
這句的"couldn't"拼錯了。
What an embarassing experience!
這句的"embarrassing"拼錯了。
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